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- Old Idea Revised
- Mistakes with horses in fantasy
- Need advice... I only have one character left, and she got bored... *sigh*
- Primates (1000 words)
- Help with a Charactor!
- Sifi artist wanted for cover work
- The Rose (1500 words)
- Novel intro & character insight (1000 words), any comments appreciated
- Alias
- Awaiting.
- Anyone bored?
- Rear Cover help? To much vs not enough
- Ghosts of the Past (Really Long)
- Changed Man (301 words)
- HUNTED.
- 0020 (1300 words, please critique)
- 3 pages of a novel, why not? :D
- Untitled
- Under the Goddess
- Corridors (contains bad language)
- Essay (Crit ASAP)
- Ending for Jack the Constant
- It runs deepest (897 words)
- I about have my first novel finished!
- One to depend On (2100 words)
- How much Dialogue?
- *sigh* What direction is best for my story, I wonder...
- Need some help/advise/criticism!!!
- Internal Conflict Examples
- Mannequin Row
- Adopting a story for the modern world
- Two things about this piece...
- A short story; Experiment
- A novice's novel
- Kindess from a Stranger
- Collaring My Puppy
- Science of Sanctification
- And her comes the plot!
- Query for an old work revised
- Laugh Lines (Revised after Rejection, help!)
- 538, short story:)
- Question
- Frank's Diner
- I sat down and really concentrated while I wrote this.
- Gentlemen, behold; Science fiction.
- Blizzard
- Rag Doll (prologue)
- Prolonged Retribution: The Rise of the Drocks
- The Dreamland Articles – Poverty’s Revelation
- First post, novel prologue [adult language and theme]
- Opening paragraph
- Stuck
- Craving a cruel critique--end of first Chapter.
- Chapters
- 'unfriendly'
- HELP! I reaallllyyy dislike this chapter :(
- Short--waking in an 1893 asylum
- College Application Essay
- Memoir Essay - What I Know at the Age of 50 - 1107 Words
- Rough Draft Prologue Thing. Untitled.
- Honest opinion of this opener of my story?
- CHAPTER 1 - A NEW AWAKENING part 2
- CHAPTER 1 - A NEW AWAKENING
- Untitled opening
- The story of Gum ? Needs critiquing
- What is the true cost of fresh food?
- Intro to ANB--teen pregnancy
- Chapter One-- please help =D
- Between
- I am Looking for a Writing Partner
- Need Critique on First Paragraph
- Any Advice?
- Short excerpt from potential novel
- First/Third Person?
- Story I wrote in 6th grade for English (short)
- Hitchhikers Guide To The Grey Matter (help!)
- POV Exercise
- Lanterns Lit
- Short Story
- Need Help
- Need Advice?
- I need advice in regards to repackaging my story after it has already been published
- My Personal Narritive "Slide"
- first thing i've written in years. advice?
- Spelling Bee (One Act Play)
- Beginners Advice - please
- Is this timeline too confusing for the average reader?
- Is this too contemplative for a sci-fi novel?
- Do you consider this solution too easy or too quick?
- The Friend's House
- Chapter-476 words (some cursing)
- School Project Help?
- Laugh-Lines (415 words--short short)
- ARRRRGH! This is kicking my butt... Can I get some input?
- Short Story. "Dan" about 1000 words
- CASTLE WALLS - Preface: Dying [1100 words, adult language]
- College Application Essay (Please Help!)
- How do you handle a major charecter with small screentime?
- Shameless plug and want of input
- Chat
- Jack, The Constant (yes, I know it's in Fiction)
- Demons(need a outside opinion)
- From Flowers to Weeds, A Novel
- Please critque this short excerpt.
- When a story stretches over a period of many years....
- "Lost Hope" Prologue
- Leaving home
- Just write...and write...and write...
- Could use a tip on which story twist I should use
- When in doubt...ask???
- Avoiding 'she xxxx as she xxxx'
- The Lives of One
- To know you more.
- Very short horror extract
- An excerpt from "Prairie Sunday"... Comments anyone?
- Rewrite in progress
- A very crude start...
- YA intro (750 words)
- PETA Parody for Adults
- Level
- My Chapter-critique
- What is the easiest way to copyright my story?
- I'd like some critique for my College Essay
- Crique needed on a few paragraphs
- Have been working on this for a while.
- Plains, trains, and Meteors -
- When should you ask about a submission?
- The Family Of God Fact File
- Fear (odd horror)
- Take a look at this, it feels dead.
- What changes needs to be made to this?
- First attempt at writing...
- "The MacCall's Sessions: Billy" (1300 words, fiction of a slightly fantastic bent)
- The Railroad Killer
- This is the book project I'm seeking a ghostwriter for
- College Application Essay
- The Hit-Crime Thriller
- Underneath the chestnut tree
- Twenty Minutes Later (flash fiction)
- Feedback on this alternate universe
- Progress / Edit
- Excaliburs Creed (Intro)
- Advice on only a title.
- Alternatives for "As if"
- Techniques for alien dialogue?
- Chapter excerpt from my novella Harlequin
- Could use some advice on a POV dilemma
- Do you like my character?
- School Essay - needs revision ASAP!
- My characters keep straying...
- What the Mime Created
- Two Monthss [Chapter one][Part one]
- Two Monthss [Chapter one][Part two]
- Trying again...can someone help with this revision?
- IIs it too confusing if the POV frequentl changes from the past to present frequently
- Names...Names...Names...
- First draft of something or other...
- Clarity, my first novel
- General Dialogue Question
- Through her eyes
- An Article from a Fictional Author!
- My Stab at a Vampire Story
- My first short story...
- Chapter two
- Help with conversation topics.
- How to Break Into Paragraphs?
- How much action is required in a superhero story?
- Need help with a name
- copy writing
- Following the try for suicide
- New member-Feedback on first chapter (short)
- Looking for some advice from personal experience
- Beginning of short story-- only like 250 words
- Bin to Earth
- Can somone PLEASE help me with this?
- A Goblin Night
- Sarcasm is the only form of wit, chapter 2
- Cylinder
- I'e started from scrap
- Friends for the Summer
- I spat out the words (823 words)
- In Jade's Arms
- Find A Ghost
- i fell in love with a mountain.
- The Blank Wall
- El Chupacabra
- Writing the same story from 3 different points of view
- "Weatherhead" Progress
- We are Legends.
- Making a better monster
- Cannibals that need critique <3
- need your opinions on my work ;)
- We Are Here - A Psychological Horror
- Help Make our jobs easier
- Cheater
- Seriously can someone help with this?
- Paranormal Chapter One
- Letters to Infinity
- Untitled
- Something new in fantasy? Help! (Setting, plot)
- Autobiographical Statement
- Second Second Coming (did i stutter?)
- "The Smoke"
- Comparing a character to a famous actor
- Is this even a grammtically correct sentence?
- Could use a tip on introducing a legendary main character
- New book, how do I beat writer's block?
- Prologue - Thundering Magic
- Finn
- Paranormal (Work-in-progress title only)
- Revised the beginning of my novel Draculesti
- In The Dark (what I've got so far)
- Trying again with my novel....Comments? Suggestions?
- Experiment in 1st person (Scifi, 539 words)
- Fresh Start (Words around 2100)
- begining (only about 500 words)
- Gold Digger
- Critigue on an idea
- I wrote a first chapter, what do you think?
- A Cup of Chicory Coffee
- Half of my short...
- Zane
- Queen of hearts
- Two Flowers On A Sidewalk
- Posting a 4,300 word short
- Need help cleaning this up
- 440 words of short story excerpt
- E-publishing, traditional or what?
- Creating a stronger sense of conflict
- Genesis Cradle - early concept
- Cold
- narrator. boy or girl
- Everyone knows Yoko, right?
- Longer Work (7,000 Words)
- A bit of non-fiction (Magazine article type) What do you think?
- can anyone help?
- Chloe & Jessica: Part 3 - The Lost City
- Critique on Scene
- Bed (1534 words)
- Prologue of my newest book...
- An interview with my two main charactes (used as bonus material)
- Diary of The Forbidden...Is it good or bad?
- Blanche Lenoir: an unfinished work
- Just for fun... Just Read!
- In The Dark continued
- Does using "furry" characters = Kids stuff?
- Part of my story. opinions are welcome. =]
- Chains
- Please Critique
- A short story. Please let me know what you think